Some great thought and effort has gone into your first ever film project. Well done.
Overall Score: 17/20
Things that really worked /are done well - you stuck to 180' rule - you you included match-on-action with the door shots - you used a good amount of close-up's that really honed in on our main character's torment - your use of lighting (or lack of lighting) and shadows was effective for the bathroom scene showing the 'darker' side to the character - your music choice was thoughtful and complimented the visual elements, well. - Great ending- flipping between real Kevin and Kevin in the fantasy. That extreme close-up and focus on the eyes is really powerful.
Tips /things you could improve on - starting music before the start of the opening (while your logo is on) to set the tone for the film opening - including an establishing shot to give the film context (this could have been a shot of the school / the bell ringing and kids going to class/ maybe even Kevin walking to school along the route that he would be envisioning his crime on) - For filming -especially the classroom scene, think about framing a bit more intentionally. There is a lot of negative space above the heads of the students / teacher and that whole shot could have been set up a bit more deliberately. - potentially using a more sinister track at the point of 'dark Kevin' appearing in the bathroom, could have been more impactful. Creating suspense is all about taking your audience deeper and deeper down the path of thought that something bad is going to happen. That bathroom scene where Kevin confronts himself in the mirror is a powerfully shot scene, it could have used a shift in music and tone to represent the darkness that was rearing it's head in his mind
Hi Chloe
ReplyDeleteSome great thought and effort has gone into your first ever film project. Well done.
Overall Score: 17/20
Things that really worked /are done well
- you stuck to 180' rule
- you you included match-on-action with the door shots
- you used a good amount of close-up's that really honed in on our main character's torment
- your use of lighting (or lack of lighting) and shadows was effective for the bathroom scene showing the 'darker' side to the character
- your music choice was thoughtful and complimented the visual elements, well.
- Great ending- flipping between real Kevin and Kevin in the fantasy. That extreme close-up and focus on the eyes is really powerful.
Tips /things you could improve on
- starting music before the start of the opening (while your logo is on) to set the tone for the film opening
- including an establishing shot to give the film context (this could have been a shot of the school / the bell ringing and kids going to class/ maybe even Kevin walking to school along the route that he would be envisioning his crime on)
- For filming -especially the classroom scene, think about framing a bit more intentionally. There is a lot of negative space above the heads of the students / teacher and that whole shot could have been set up a bit more deliberately.
- potentially using a more sinister track at the point of 'dark Kevin' appearing in the bathroom, could have been more impactful. Creating suspense is all about taking your audience deeper and deeper down the path of thought that something bad is going to happen. That bathroom scene where Kevin confronts himself in the mirror is a powerfully shot scene, it could have used a shift in music and tone to represent the darkness that was rearing it's head in his mind
Also, music is usually conventionally a feature of the end credits.
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